Can everyone please give insight to my paper, ways that I may improve it? Yes the title does need to be changed and so on and so forth; and yes, z0ne will like the paper (I did side on Subaru for it).

Paper in Word Format..... sorry

Your last name...are you related to diesel?!? heh

in all seriousness tho im about to sleep so I'm too lazy to read this right now :\

LOL. No, sorry.

your teacher lets you write papers on rally cars??

Yes, she said all it had to be was an argumentive paper so.......

Oh man... good luck.

Yes, I am going to need it... but anyone have any insight on it?

The only parts of that paper that are actually relevant to the point you're trying to make are the second (barely) and last paragraphs. All of the history is nice and somewhat interesting, but not important. Anyone who doesn't live, breath, and eat cars is not gonna care one bit, and it does nothing for your argument. Speaking of which, your argument is incredibly weak. You have no sources, no data, and really nothing which proves that the STi is a better car than the Evo. It reads like you rewrote Subaru's ad copy with a specifically anti-Evo slant. You establish no credibility with the reader so your "argument" cannot be taken at anything but face value. I'm not even sure you've driven either one of the cars, based off of that, and even if you have, I'm not sure why I should listen to your opinion. Also, quoting Top Gear is really, really cheesy. They are a dubious source, at best.

Other than that, you're gonna have some comprehension issues with uninformed readers (your explanation of the group B -> group N transition expects alot of previous knowledge, as does your initial description of rallying in regards to terminology and knowledge of F1). And you've got some spelling, punctuation, and grammatical errors.

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There was a Subaru anti-EVO ad?

Well at least you responded, and I thank you for that. I do have to rewrite most of it to take into account what you have said.

I would say change the arguement completely. You're arguing something that is near completely subjective and the teacher will view it as nothing more but a waste of her time. You need to pick a topic that has some manner of factual evidence behind it.

If you're going to do cars why not cover bigger topics such as emissions regulations or hydrogen power?

No, what I said was it sounded like you took a Subaru ad and rewrote it, adding an anti-Evo slant to it.

If this paper is for a college writing class, then I think it'd be an instant F. High school, it might slide with a C.

lol, i like the end.

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i'm reading it now, anhtu (ahn-tOO?)

thoughts:
-you spelled "curb" wrong (you spelled it "kerb")

thats it , great paper. i thing you have a very strong conclusion paragraph, also.

i find papers on car related debates are always weak in argument strength. Not because the arguments arent good, but because you have to explain whatevery thing means because you are supposed to write school papers like the reader knows NOTHING. i wrote a paper on the history of Porsche, and it was one of the weakest papers ever. Its VERY hard to install passion in someone through writting. if you can do that, then you are a gifted writer. this paper is no acception. lack luster because you have to explain so much. i'd pick somthing like abortion or somthing really blan and generic that people can get REALLY upset about, the easiest way to get people passionate about somthing is to question thier morals.

yeah except it's wrong...

I agree with Jordan, the best topics to write about are the ones that basically generate complaint mail for CNN. For example my essay topic for Law class this semester is, "Terrorists: Thugs or Freedom Fighters?" - naturally I took the side of Freedom Fighters. I didn't take that side because I agree with it (I seriously don't) but because it'll get the reader, as in teacher, fired up and therefore be a very effective essay